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Write a description with the title, ‘Underwater’.

Prompt: Write a description with the title, ‘Underwater’.

Essay:

A dazzling shaft of light pierced the cerulean gloom, refracting into a kaleidoscope of shifting hues. The silence was profound, interrupted only by the rhythmic exhale of my breath through the regulator. The ocean enveloped me, its embrace both tranquil and overwhelming, as if the weight of its ancient depths pressed gently but insistently against my chest.

Faint silhouettes of coral formations loomed in the distance, their jagged shapes softening as I swam closer. An entire world revealed itself: vibrant sponges painted in fiery oranges and crimson reds; tendrils of sea anemones swaying to an unseen rhythm. Schools of fish darted past, their scales glinting like fragments of sunlight captured in motion. A barracuda hovered nearby, its silver body shimmering like a blade as it watched me with an air of calculated indifference.

Recommendation:
To further refine descriptive writing skills, the writer could study Under the Sea-Wind by Rachel Carson. Carson’s ability to weave scientific detail with poetic imagery would provide valuable insights into crafting vivid and emotionally resonant descriptions.

Mark awarded for content and structure = 16/16
Mark awarded for style and accuracy = 24/24
Total marks awarded = 40/40